Wednesday, February 24

Walking On The Beach...


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Shaun walked aimlessly. The brisk wind was playing with his hair. His steps were getting muddled with the sand beneath. The rubber slipper he was wearing was trying to get out of the clutch of fingers.
‘Sir, please buy one ice cream.’
He looked back. A thin bare chested boy was standing with a box full of ice creams. Out of pity Shaun purchased one ice cream. In between his leaking nose and lower lip there came a smile, almost! Without a time waste he hurried to his next prospective customers. He was trying hard to manage the big box in his hands together with his ragged trouser. Seeing the boy going happy two beggars approached Shaun.
‘Sir, didn’t have food since long’
Their faces were complimenting each other. Seems they were sisters or maybe mother and daughter. Their eyes were hunger-stricken. Shaun looked at his ice cream and then without a second though he handed it over to the younger girl. They were not that happy with his gesture and asked for some pennies. But then by that time Shaun had moved ahead.

He could see lots of kids playing on the beach. Few were building castles with sand. The naughty ones will wait till the castle is on half way to break them to ground. Few kids were playing ‘catch-me-if-you-can’ with the tides. A smile came to his mind. He always had loved kids. He always had adored their innocence. He always had envied their ‘tension-free’ life.

The sun was half dipped in the ocean, looking bright red. The horizon looked blood red with a touch of golden streaks. Few migrating birds added beauty to the picturesque view. While enjoying the sight Shaun’s eyes got locked at a couple. Never bothered about the surroundings, they were busy with themselves. The woman was holding his hands tight and the only thing they could see were each others eyes. The silence between them seemed to add the romance between them. Then slowly their lips met, explored each others, and then that turned onto a wild kiss. Her fingers ran through his hair and his hands through her back.

Shaun stared them for few moments and then headed towards where his car is parked. The sun had almost gone under the vastness of the ocean. His face was searching for someone. That is when he noticed an elderly couple chatting. They were older by how many years, he couldn’t guess, but the freshness in their faces which was overflowing made him understand how much they were in love with each other. The old lady was helping her partner to walk with his ‘walking-stick’

‘How long had you been married?’ Out of curiosity Shaun asked them. At first the couple stared at him confused. Then the old man said, ‘55 years’ and kissed on her cheeks, gently. Shaun saw that she still was blushing. He stood motionless. The couple walked away. He stared at them endlessly.


The reality stuck him then suddenly
The final hearing of his divorce case is to be benched tomorrow.
Is there any comeback…

He walked slowly, aimlessly… Shattered…!!

13 comments:

Adisha said...

Firstly I Loved the scene. It truly took me away to the beach looking through Shaun's eyes... You have great visualization techniques... something I'm trying to develop since long time ...

The only roadblocks seemed the obvious gramatical errors ... With a little crisp editing I think this piece would have been PERFECT.

eg : " slowly their lips met, explored each others, and then that turned onto a wild kiss."

could be " slowly their lips met, tentatively exploring turning into a wild explosive kiss " ???

and

" his hands through her back "

Should be

" his hands over her back "

" Without a time waste he hurried .."

should be

" Without wasting another second, he hurried .. "

Just a few egs to give you an idea.

Keep writing ... you've got a fan in me... :) Moving on to the next one!

Vinz said...

Point noted Adisha...

Thanks for corrections..

:)

Keep visiting...

vimmuuu said...

I loved it; as usual your twists at the end rock !

Pakshe aalu oru vrithikettavanaanennu manasilaayi !! :D :D

commited to life said...

it was perfect!

Vinz said...

@vimmuu,

manassilaayi alley..

;)

Vinz said...

@life.

thank u..
keep visiting..!!

:)

The Ketchup Girl said...

that was depressing. :( But beautifully written.

Vinz said...

@ketchup,

thank u..!!

:)

Oru said...

Oh..i loved this.. the shatter...
quite like trying to retrieve one's foot prints on the sand..washed away..
yeah.. one hell of a story..!!

Vinz said...

Arundhati,

Thanx...
Yeah i knw...Its fun..the try to retrieve part

We become kids again those moments..
:)

Oru said...

Oh no.. i meant stepping back from the about-to-be divorced relationship as well... that's like trying to retrieve footprints almost washed away...
n yes..playing with the waves is as much fun.. love being the kid then.. :)

Vinz said...

@arundhati,

right..spot on..
But then again, as the wash-away-footprint, its not easy...

the waves do wash the foot prints..so in such relationships..the charm will be never as before...

Vinz

Oru said...

Aha..true... very true...