Wednesday, April 29

Damn This World...


I don’t know. I really love spending time with her. If someone asks me why I am attracted to her, I got hundreds of reasons. No other woman had made me feel this way.

Her lips are so pink in color. Every other girl envied this part of hers. There is a talk among guys that nobody else’s lips are as ripe as hers. Perfectly shaped and curved. Looking into those lips itself is a great pleasure. But the best feature in her face is her smile. Her smile had captivated lots of guy’s desires in my class. The way she smiles is something worth watching.

I am very lucky to have her as a friend. I am the one who spends the most time with her in college. She is never attached to anyone else as the way she is to me. But does she know me? Does she understand me or my feelings? Does she that I love her?

I don’t think so.

Yeah, I am in love with her. Her smile, her gentle touch, her chatter, her cribbing, her excitements, her enthusiasm, the way she walks, the way she dances, the way she hum tunes, the way she gets angry, the way she play with kids, the way she handle people, her opinions, her eccentricities and what not.

Yeah, I am in love with her. Her sparkling eyes, her wide smile, her beautiful nose, her protruding lips, her perfectly curved body, her dressing sense, her smell, her voice, her hugs and what not?

Yeah, I am in love with her. But does she know that? She won’t ever realize how much I love her. Even if she realize she won’t understand me. She will never respect my feelings for her, my cravings for her, my desires to be with her, to be pampered by her, to pamper her, to be caressed by her. Never ever I can reveal my desire to spend my whole life with her, to make love with her.

Loving her is becoming a pain. A pain which I can never share with anyone else. Even if I share it will only elevate my pain. Damn this world. Nobody is there to understand to my feelings. Nobody is there to accept my feelings even if they understand.

After all in this society it is a taboo for a woman to have such feelings for other woman.

Damn this world !!

99 comments:

yamini meduri said...

hmmm....

the first part of the post was really damn good...but the last line changed the emotion....!!!

but still a perfect way to express love in words..!!

vimmuuu said...

Oh, this was a story! and I thought you were revealing your real love!!!

"Loving her is becoming a pain" --- Dude, loving anyone is a big pain !!! LOL.

comfortably numb said...

n thr goes the twist!!!
beautifully expressed:)

Hemanth Potluri said...

i always wonder how the twist comes...and u come up so nicely we cant imagine that there is really a twist :P...gr8 job bro...

sometimes i to wish to say damn this world :)..

urs..hemu..

Keshi said...

Love sure is a pain in the ass lol!

but well-written post Vinu.

u dun visit me anymore but I guess everyone needs a break from their old mates :)

Keep writing!

Keshi.

tinkerbell said...

wow!! beautifully written.. the last line did sort of toss my insides !!... before i saw ur comment :)..

Arv said...

the dude is back :)

and so are his twists... he hee...

kewl one bro...

have a nice day... cheers...

Vinod R Iyer said...

If I hadn't read the last line, I would have concluded that this was a page from your high school diary or something :P . Nice twist :)

ANWESA said...

omg!!this was really a twist in the tale..4m a bollywood potboiler,it turned out 2 b so very different..kudos!!

Gufy said...

good one dude...very good... aaj se tere blogs padhna chalu ;)
keep writing :)

Thoorika said...

Someone is back with a bang...!! Great one !!! :)

oo7 said...

lovely mate...
it was well written!

you did touch a sensitive topic.

though i don't have a problem... :)

Swats said...

OH GOD..u r UNPREDICTABLE..
this ws captivating..

Smita said...

That twist in the tale was killer :-)

But loved every bit of emotion in this story :-)

Vee said...

Whoa, I think I got the point. Damn this world and damn all those who make a rule for love. Love is beautiful which knows no boundaries. ;)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@yamini,

the emotion in th story or ur emotion..?

thnx for visiting
:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@vimalz,

:)
I almost guessed this comment of urs.. :)

And yeah, very true man..loving at times can be a pain.. ;)

chandni said...

nicely done! :)

Femin Susan said...

I agree with vimalz,
oving at times can be a pain.. ;)
cheers!

Devika said...

Vinu I thought you were a young man! :((

why did you chose to be a woman here? I really would wish to know!

anyway, nicely written, :)

wishes,
devika

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@saim,

thnx man..!!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@hemant,

thnx hemanth..
i am happy u liked the twist..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@keshi,

hey, thnx for visiting..i will come soon ..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@tinkerbell,

thnak u girl...
happy it was a gud twist..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@arv,

yeah bro...
am back...
hope to entertain u in the same way..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@vinod,

thnx man..
so it worked.. !!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@anwesa,

thank u anwesa..
not a bollywood kinda thing..
but again tried to bring a gud twist..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@gufy,

bhai..thnx for dropping by,....
keep visiting..!!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@thoorika,

thnx girl..
thnx for ur visit..
and happy u liked it..!!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@vicky,

thnx man..yeah, i wanted to bring a twist..
so thought y nt an untouched topic..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@swats,

am i.. ?
:)

thnx...

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@sita,

thnk u friend...
happy that u enjoyed the first part also..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@vee,

dude, agreed completely...
it should never be with any boundaries..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@chandni,

thnx friend..!!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@susan,

thnx for dropping by..
thnx for agreeing with my views too..
:)

keep visiting..

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

oh yeah, i am what u thought...
but in my stories i get into the skin of the protagonist.. :)

u can see me in many other forms too..a child, a husband or wtever which i am not..!!

You never know, next my protagonist can be a granny..


:)

Devika said...

Haha! granny??

if you need any consultation, am always available! :))

i know there's no dearth of experience around for a discerning mind! :)

devika

Femin Susan said...

Thanks for visiting my blog and your kind comment. feel free to visit again.
Cheers!

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

:)
sure..

by the way i am nt able to comment on ur blog..
:(
y these restrictions..?

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@susan,

oh, its my pleasure..]
keep writing..and i will dropping visits quite often..
:)

Devika said...

Closed it dear,
not able to catch up with the 'spirits' of many readers :))

if you like poetry -- I have a new blog...'Abstract Deductions'

anyway, thanks for reading Vinu :)

wishes,
devika

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

wokiey..no issues..personal choice..
anyways will visit the poem blog soon..i had a visit once i think..
anyways, i love poems..i feel thats the best way to vent your feelings..vent way in th sense in the most beautiful way..

wish i could write gud lines... :(

sawan said...

man, tht was freaking good!! such a twist!! respects..

Devika said...

But Vinu, as I learn the aesthetics of poetry...i come to know it has nothing to do with feelings!

but then -- without the reference point (often a thought or feeling) there's no poetry also!

anyway...for me, its all a pass time,


wishes,
devika

Pooja said...

wow!!!

dat's all i can say...

Heart'n'Soul said...

OMG.... breath takin... so so so wonderfully expressed, the tussle that wud go in sum1s mind...

and well, even i thought u tellin us bout ur love...LOL

but commendable job Vinu!

Mayz said...

dude u changed ur gender???

Priya Joyce said...

well frankly..I felt t'was abt u..and iwas juss gonna echo Mayank hahaha ..but never mind i read the othere comments.so i understand its fiction :P

Velu said...

Nicely done. the twist was neat.

Cheers,
Velu

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@sawan,

thnx yaar..
:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

yeah, i understand u keep on refining ur poetry writing skill even if it is as a timepass...

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@pooja,

thanks..
and thats what only i got to say..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@divz,

oh yeah...am happy the twist worked very well...

thnks for the visit...

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@mayz,

hehe...no mayank...
hope u liked the story..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@priya,

:)
i know everybody got the same first impression...

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@velu,

thnx for dropping by..
gud to hear that u liked the twist..

:)

Devika said...

yeah Vinu, as part of being earnest with Time, the master of life :)

I know thats saying too much..but yes, i strive to learn every moment...and that could be bringing in a refinedness, perhaps...now that you say,

wishes,
devika

Diana. said...

Ur back with ur twists....seriously man the last line takes the cake...

keep writing.

muthu said...

nice write but a clichéd twist if you ask me.....

Vinnie said...

hehehe...kya twist maara hain! nice:)

Towards reclamation said...

is the love becoming a pain or your act of suppressing it for the fear of the world that causes it ... ? i think the latter ..
gud one .. and actually a very relevant post ..

Velu said...

Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my blog vinu.

If you ever wonder what to do with that stamp collection of yours, My address is on my blog. :)

Cheers,
Velu

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

i would love to get more into poetry, and sometime i would like my readers to identify me as a not-bad poet too.. :)

so, drop a mail to vinumohanlal@gmail since u have not activated ur comment session..i can correspond to u thru that medium and therebyy we can discuss ur poems and i can learn..!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@diana,

thnx girl..
keep visiting..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@muthu,

ur point noted..
just wrote wt came to my mind that time..it was not premeditated..!!

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@vinnie,

:)
thanx yaar..

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@sidharth,

definitely the latter..
but again the root cause is wt..?

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@velu,

yup..but thts provided if i think in those lanes..yeah definitely, then it will be to ur address...

:)

Devika said...

Sure no issues, Vinay
I will send the mail tonight...

but then what I have to say is, the masters from whom I learnt the Japanese forms and use of imageries as in Abstract Deduction blog are out there...Andrew Lockhart, and his blog has a complete list of Haiku poets...reading more and more is one way to learn...

ofcourse holding discussion is something I love to do..and we will take time out during weekends, if thats okay :)

i'll send the mail tonight Vinu :)

devika

Cinderella. said...

Now this is the kind of story that reminds me of another writer I knew. And if I be honest not particularly to my taste.
:(

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devika,

:)

oh yeah, am a follower of Andrew..

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@palavini,

nice seeing u around here..yeah, taste do differ from person to person..!!

keep visiting..!!

:)

pinkZz said...

hey.. thanks for dropping by my post..
and i loved dis one.
beautifully written..

follow me if you like my page enough
:smiles

Ashwathy said...

loved the twist in the end... just that one sentence and all's topsy turvy. nice one! keep it coming! :-)

Tabitha said...

The twist at the end is quite alarming.

Chronicwriter said...

i wish i were in love

chriz

Ashwathy said...

blogrolled u btw..
u write really well :-)

moi said...

beautiul man, you started it off so well, and ending was hillarious, just loved it, i just love the way you express it, damn the world, you are a gem!!

Newbie Mommy said...

Good stuff dude :D

Cess said...

glad 2 see that u re back, and i m happy i spotted the end of the story before the end itself. Very nice, very nice :)

alphabetworld said...

Whoa! Good one.
But well, be it man or woman, love is always a pain ;)

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

baaaha...thats heartbreak

ps:tell her its legal now. :P

i want to be... said...

hey dat was really deep man!!

Devil Incarnate... said...

O man, that was toooooo gud..
never expected that twist at the end, wow wt a flow, simply loved it...
by the way, guess expressing is not a crime anymore i guess :)

shefali said...

i Love u for what u wrote............very beautiful..
my eyes filled wid tears reading it.....

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@pinkz,

Thank U Pinkz

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@Ashwathy,

Thank U Ashwathy..
Glad to know you liked it..

Keep visiting..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@tabitha,

Thank You Reader..!!

Keep visiting..

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@chriz,

ooo...with whom..??
;)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@moi,

thanks a lot..
that was a bunch of compliments..
keep visiting..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@newbie,

Thnx a lot for ur visit...

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@cess,

oh really..great ..
i will to bring more suspense..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@alphabet..

yeah, agreed...
this is one of many stories..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@scarlet,

yeah, i know...
its legal..
bt again a taboo..

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@i want to be,

thanks for the visit...

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@devil incarnate,

yeah, expressing is no more a crime..
but definitely a taboo, still...

:)

Vinz aka Vinu said...

@shefali,

Thnx dear for your visit..
:)

Bindhu Unny said...

Nice one, Vinz. By now, at least it's legal! :-)

payal kalra said...

OMG! wat a shock
twisty end...

lurved it btw :)