It was raining
In a crowd,
When our eyes met.
It was raining
On the beach,
When he proposed; blissfully.
It was raining
Our first kiss; crisp
When the rain dripped through our lips
It was raining
Seeing the skies above,
When we made love; eternal.
It was raining
My eyes; teary
When he said bye to me
Forever…
20 comments:
Nice to see the word eternal after that line..wonderful description..:)
:)
LOVELY DEAR........
Sigh...I didnt see that coming. :(
Stories/Poems always has it as he left her .. Fantasy world I guess :)
Rains are here .. To wash away the tears ? :)
Oh! tats vry sad...
@pramoda,
thnx a lot..
:)
@shefs,
thanx dear...
@cinderella,
:)
twist..??
:)
@vinod,
commented back on ur fb page..
:)
@devil incarnate,
yeah, didnt want to end like that..but just came up that way..
:(
sob sob :(
that was beautiful. very sad ending. but real.
Painful...
I thought that it was going to be blissful forever but.. :(
Wonderfully written.
@cimmited to life,
:(
@Lanie,
Thank u for ur comment..
Do keep visiting..
:)
@Shas,
Yeah, but then the blissful ending wud have been like a typical movie climax...so brought a bad twist..
;)
Frst tym on ur blog...its a sexy one..luscious kind.wud love to know u more...
Beautiful.
I loved the tenderness in the entire poetry :)
Keep that freshness alive
Cheers
Its just lovely....... :) :) :)
Felt every drop of it.. been there done that.. n miss it...
bless u..:)
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