Thursday, June 10

It Was Raining...

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It was raining
In a crowd,
When our eyes met.

It was raining
On the beach,
When he proposed; blissfully.

It was raining
Our first kiss; crisp
When the rain dripped through our lips

It was raining
Seeing the skies above,
When we made love; eternal.

It was raining
My eyes; teary
When he said bye to me

Forever…



20 comments:

Being Pramoda... said...

Nice to see the word eternal after that line..wonderful description..:)

Shefs said...

:)
LOVELY DEAR........

Cinderella said...

Sigh...I didnt see that coming. :(

Vinod R Iyer said...

Stories/Poems always has it as he left her .. Fantasy world I guess :)

Rains are here .. To wash away the tears ? :)

Devil Incarnate... said...

Oh! tats vry sad...

Vinz said...

@pramoda,

thnx a lot..

:)

Vinz said...

@shefs,

thanx dear...

Vinz said...

@cinderella,

:)
twist..??

:)

Vinz said...

@vinod,

commented back on ur fb page..

:)

Vinz said...

@devil incarnate,

yeah, didnt want to end like that..but just came up that way..

:(

commited to life said...

sob sob :(

Lanie said...

that was beautiful. very sad ending. but real.

Shas said...

Painful...
I thought that it was going to be blissful forever but.. :(
Wonderfully written.

Vinz said...

@cimmited to life,

:(

Vinz said...

@Lanie,

Thank u for ur comment..
Do keep visiting..

:)

Vinz said...

@Shas,

Yeah, but then the blissful ending wud have been like a typical movie climax...so brought a bad twist..

;)

Nikita said...

Frst tym on ur blog...its a sexy one..luscious kind.wud love to know u more...

Vee said...

Beautiful.

Dawn said...

I loved the tenderness in the entire poetry :)

Keep that freshness alive

Cheers

Oru said...

Its just lovely....... :) :) :)
Felt every drop of it.. been there done that.. n miss it...
bless u..:)