He kept his mobile aside. Every one minute he passed a glance over it. Confirmed there was no call missed. He was feeling restless. He turned here and there on the bed. He closed his eyes and covered his head down below the pillow. The noise of fan was piercing his ears. He tightened the grip of pillow over himself. He twined his legs. Two minutes past that he threw the pillow towards the door. Got up from the bed and got hold of the cigarette packet. He lit one fag in a jiffy. Smoke tunneled from him like from a steam engine. He verified the mobile once again. The wrinkles on his face were showing the frustration. He went to the bathroom to get a leak. A drop or two; There was nothing more to come. Flushed the toilet and came back to the room, slamming the door.
He took his mobile in hand, dialed the short dial number. He saw screen showing her name. It read ‘Calling Babez’, it read. Before getting connected he canceled the call. A deep sigh came out from him. He kept the mobile back, crawled back into the bed. He tried to close his eyes tight. Few minutes went by. He got up back and looked at the mobile. It was lying there silent, unmoved, as if this was not the first time all these are happening. He felt each second passing like decades.
Two minutes. The mobile started ringing. He grabbed it quickly and checked the name. It was her only. He kept it back. The rings went on and then dead. The screen showed ‘1 Missed Call’. He stared at the mobile. It again started ringing. One ring, second ring, third, fourth and so on. Before it got dead he jumped and got the mobile, his fingers pressed the button. The call was on.
“I am sorry”, a sweet trembled voice filled with grief whispered.
A moment of pause.
“No, I am sorry” He said.
Another moment of silence, but this was a sweet one.
Both smiled, burgeoning to laughter.
It take only few words to melt down the tension resulted from a fracas.
86 comments:
you've just made me realize how even the simplest of things that happen to all of us can be such a nice read.. you reminded me of some good ol' days :) thanks :) and well done!
sometimes it takes eternity...
Awwwww!I so know that feeling.
Very well described :)
@divya,
thank you ..
i love such simple things of life...that makes me moving ahead..!!
@mayz,
maybe, but it does happen..!!
:)
@sameera,
thanks ...
:)
Hmmmmmm
Good one....so descriptive...and kept us intact!!!
cute althou :DD
Ur character is allowed to smoke coz its not 2nd Oct yet lol..
Yeah a genuine sorry says it all!
It was my poem over at Surface Tension. Marge likes to come in and rewrite my stuff, for some unknown reason. Hey, like your work. Go check out Three Word Wednesday, where I've been picking tho words for three weeks now.
ThomG
dude did u copy my mind...u rote my feeling totally but actually i dint get the call...and the call i made was not lifted :P..ehhehe...anyways it was well described gr8 feeling's in it...:)...hey wat abt the book u rite sure give me a character like this :P...lol..
urs..hemu..
P.S:cud u remove this word verification in comment
lovely
and i think tat u have experienced it tats why u are able to put it so well. I just think so coz of the brilliance with which u have written it.
@chakoli,
thanks friend..
:)
@swats,
but the character is smoking in his room..private room..i think our minister had given that freedom..!!
:)
@ThomG
welcome to this sphere..great to know you liked this..!!
:)
@hemanth,
sure man..u will be definitely one character.. ;)
the word verification thing will be removed..!!
:)
@priya joyce,
i write stuff which i experience or i observe from my surroundings..!!and always i try to add some flavor to it..!!
great to know there is an impact in what i write...
nice one, but i m surrounded by 'sorry-less-asshole' these days :( It can be so simple only 3 damn words, no, even just one 'sorry'.
Again a great one, u set up a very high standard, i m looking for high expectations now :D
C.
@cess,
:)..it happens cess...just pass a smile..thats all you have to do..
thanks for your appreciations..i hope somehow i justify that..!!
:)
Pheewww!!! Such is life and so are humans..... Nicely written.. :)
well written. I am curious. Do you see a picture and weave a story around it or do you write a story and try to find its corresponding picture?
@oxy,
very true, mate...
well put up..!!
:)
@kiran,
:)
thanks.
i just write and then search for pictures.. its just to give a feel..!! kind of a lipstick for the story..!!
:)
so cute :)
good writeup. But I really wonder if ppl wud say Sorry that often and that much in real life...
like Cess said, it seems like Im surrounded by Sorry-less assholes.
Keshi.
Nicely written, vinz.
:)
And yes.
The pics you pick are always well suited. .. . .
;)
Maybe it does. But when these things happen over and over again, the honeymoon phase fades.
the last line - how true!!
its always a beautiful feeling mate... Remember it so well :)
Nice post.. cheers....
@gunj,
thanks..!!
:)
@keshi,
i wont say everyone do say that..but i feel at least some does.
you and cess now had teamed up to bash all ass-holes it seems..!! :)
by the way we can ask our characters to say whatever we want... ;)
@riversoul,
thanks Sid...
:)
@solitaire,
:) very true...
but somewhere it will be alive, i feel..!!
@Andrew,
yeah, thanks.!!
:)
@arv,
that can be testified by only those who had experienced it...and it seems your are blessed..!!
:)
yeah..dat happens all d tym...
gr8 happiness s hidden in li'l thngs..
beautiful. Period.
Greetings. Nice of you to drop-in bro'... Thanks for the blogroll.
Nice blog... Will explore it in due time.
Peace, and have a nice day.
Thts so true, most of the times all we need is to let go of that voice in our head tht says though u wanna talk, just test the othr person a lil...
Well written as always Vinu :)
nice post yaar....this is the first time i am reading you but u made my mind think about "what next?"
good and keep blogging
make some time and visit mine tooo
that's really cute
you just made me realise again how lucky i am to have my fionce... thankyou for that :)
keep rocking!!
Are you not glad for cell phones...warna us zamane mai - phone nahi lagta tha...disturbance hota tha....
this mode of communication has both side....fast lafdas and fast patana....
sometime I miss the endearing feeling there was in the waiting....
n yet sumtimes all d talk in the town cannot mend that fault line tht gets created in hearts:(
nice read!!!
its so difficult to be silent...
@pooja,
very true...well said..these little things make up our life..!!
:)
@descrying
thanks for the visit..
:)
@kartz,
welcome...
thanks..!!
:)
@mini mouse,
:)
hehe...your words come from experience i guess..
;)
@dilmainhainpyar,
welcome to this space..
good to see that you liked the article...
hope to see you over here again..
:)
@warm sunshine
oh yeah..u r lucky..!!
thanks for dropping by..
do keep visiting..
:)
@ceedy,
yeah man...mobiles had made life easier and hectic..!!
:)
there will be always something we loose when we gain something, right..??
:)
@saim,
very true..thats the power of such words..but yeah, it should be heart felt..!!
:)
@anwesa,
very true..but some people do prefer silence..
;)
Awww....so darn real n so darn warm !!!
And this makes me think. Mobiles nahi hote toh najane kya hota !
I rem'ber our landline days, we used to fix times n hang around near the ph when the time arrived and you're damned if you miss that call !
Are you emulating SRk now ;)
@cinderella,
thank you cinderella...
yeah, life would have been boring without mobile.I cant live ten minutes without my mobile..
:)
fixing times and impatiently waiting for the calls..what all blunders happen that time..!!
:)
@ceedy,
oh pheuleeezzz...
not him..
:)
hahahhaa
but you did....just the english version - mai kyaaa karruuuuu :P
@c..c..c..ceedy,
did you feel so..?
that was unintentional..
;)
U,Ur Cell, and She...when comes togather volcano erupts in US.
he and babez are lucky... for some people the expected call never comes... and even after 4 years of waiting .... funny bloggers are born out of expecting calls
@vinu
wonderful!
how did i miss you..
will be regular..
take care..
MIP
@abby,
:)
@chriz,
:)
maybe..
@MIP,
thank you..thanks for dropping by...
keep visiting..!!
:)
Lucky u bro....it just takes an initiative on one end..and it's not called losing if u gain the love by admitting yeah I was wrong :)
So cute and so true...it only takes a few words, at times a smile to melt the tensions of little quarells....
Nice post!
will visit again...
devika
I hope they both walk together forever,never to depart.
take care
I was caught in mid-air reading this...so so true...and so so sweet!
@daydreamer,
~~it just takes an initiative on one end..~~
well said friend...life is all about implementing such simple things..!!
:)
@devika
thanks devika for dropping by..
very well said..
keep visiting..!!
:)
Nicely written!
Great tallent. Have a nice week.
this happens to me every night! we cant be indifferent for long, specially in love ;)
great read!
WOW! This has happened to almost all, I guess LOL. Nicely written :)
@vicky
lets hope..!!
:)
@mariposa,
thanks friend..
do keep visiting..!!
@david,
thnx mate..
do keep visiting...
:)
@divz,
great you could relate this story..
thats a great feeling..!!
:)
@aneesh,
:)
thanks man..yeah it do happen with everyone...i just penned it down..
this happens to all of us at some point or the other... i guess... but it isn't easy all the time..nor successful... but i like the way u portrayed it and ...the fact that both people said sorry.... many a times its always a blame game... when a simple sorry can do wonders.... cheers
@the army guy
it is never easy man..it is not..!!
the blame game is what destroys a relationship..
thanks for the visit..
do visiting..
No updates?
Keshi.
The stratergies ought to be changed.
Ahh..I liked tht line!
nice thingie..
This was too good... this has happened a few times with me when i have had a tiff with someone special, at times it just takes a little effort wherein one person has to just forgo their ego to make things fine.
Reeta,
thanks friend...
you are very true..forgoing your ego is what brings the happiness in such relationships..!!
:)
thats really cute...one of the best stories i'v ever read....ur good at writing such senti stuff...great work,seriously...
:-)
@mads,
:)
not the best story i guess..
anyways great it entertained u too..!!
keep visiting..!!
:)
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