Wednesday, October 1

Am Sorry...


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He kept his mobile aside. Every one minute he passed a glance over it. Confirmed there was no call missed. He was feeling restless. He turned here and there on the bed. He closed his eyes and covered his head down below the pillow. The noise of fan was piercing his ears. He tightened the grip of pillow over himself. He twined his legs. Two minutes past that he threw the pillow towards the door. Got up from the bed and got hold of the cigarette packet. He lit one fag in a jiffy. Smoke tunneled from him like from a steam engine. He verified the mobile once again. The wrinkles on his face were showing the frustration. He went to the bathroom to get a leak. A drop or two; There was nothing more to come. Flushed the toilet and came back to the room, slamming the door.


He took his mobile in hand, dialed the short dial number. He saw screen showing her name. It read ‘Calling Babez’, it read. Before getting connected he canceled the call. A deep sigh came out from him. He kept the mobile back, crawled back into the bed. He tried to close his eyes tight. Few minutes went by. He got up back and looked at the mobile. It was lying there silent, unmoved, as if this was not the first time all these are happening. He felt each second passing like decades.
Two minutes. The mobile started ringing. He grabbed it quickly and checked the name. It was her only. He kept it back. The rings went on and then dead. The screen showed ‘1 Missed Call’. He stared at the mobile. It again started ringing. One ring, second ring, third, fourth and so on. Before it got dead he jumped and got the mobile, his fingers pressed the button. The call was on.
“I am sorry”, a sweet trembled voice filled with grief whispered.
A moment of pause.
“No, I am sorry” He said.

Another moment of silence, but this was a sweet one.
Both smiled, burgeoning to laughter.
It take only few words to melt down the tension resulted from a fracas.

86 comments:

DMulan said...

you've just made me realize how even the simplest of things that happen to all of us can be such a nice read.. you reminded me of some good ol' days :) thanks :) and well done!

Lucifer said...

sometimes it takes eternity...

Sameera Ansari said...

Awwwww!I so know that feeling.

Very well described :)

Vinz said...

@divya,

thank you ..
i love such simple things of life...that makes me moving ahead..!!

Vinz said...

@mayz,

maybe, but it does happen..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@sameera,

thanks ...

:)

Chakoli said...

Hmmmmmm


Good one....so descriptive...and kept us intact!!!

cute althou :DD

Anonymous said...

Ur character is allowed to smoke coz its not 2nd Oct yet lol..

Yeah a genuine sorry says it all!

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

It was my poem over at Surface Tension. Marge likes to come in and rewrite my stuff, for some unknown reason. Hey, like your work. Go check out Three Word Wednesday, where I've been picking tho words for three weeks now.

ThomG

Hemanth Potluri said...

dude did u copy my mind...u rote my feeling totally but actually i dint get the call...and the call i made was not lifted :P..ehhehe...anyways it was well described gr8 feeling's in it...:)...hey wat abt the book u rite sure give me a character like this :P...lol..

urs..hemu..

P.S:cud u remove this word verification in comment

Priya Joyce said...

lovely
and i think tat u have experienced it tats why u are able to put it so well. I just think so coz of the brilliance with which u have written it.

Vinz said...

@chakoli,

thanks friend..
:)

Vinz said...

@swats,

but the character is smoking in his room..private room..i think our minister had given that freedom..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@ThomG

welcome to this sphere..great to know you liked this..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@hemanth,

sure man..u will be definitely one character.. ;)

the word verification thing will be removed..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@priya joyce,

i write stuff which i experience or i observe from my surroundings..!!and always i try to add some flavor to it..!!

great to know there is an impact in what i write...

Cess said...

nice one, but i m surrounded by 'sorry-less-asshole' these days :( It can be so simple only 3 damn words, no, even just one 'sorry'.
Again a great one, u set up a very high standard, i m looking for high expectations now :D

C.

Vinz said...

@cess,

:)..it happens cess...just pass a smile..thats all you have to do..

thanks for your appreciations..i hope somehow i justify that..!!

:)

Vee said...

Pheewww!!! Such is life and so are humans..... Nicely written.. :)

kiran sawhney said...

well written. I am curious. Do you see a picture and weave a story around it or do you write a story and try to find its corresponding picture?

Vinz said...

@oxy,

very true, mate...
well put up..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@kiran,

:)
thanks.
i just write and then search for pictures.. its just to give a feel..!! kind of a lipstick for the story..!!

:)

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

so cute :)

Keshi said...

good writeup. But I really wonder if ppl wud say Sorry that often and that much in real life...

like Cess said, it seems like Im surrounded by Sorry-less assholes.


Keshi.

RiverSoul said...

Nicely written, vinz.
:)

And yes.
The pics you pick are always well suited. .. . .
;)

Solitaire said...

Maybe it does. But when these things happen over and over again, the honeymoon phase fades.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the last line - how true!!

Arv said...

its always a beautiful feeling mate... Remember it so well :)

Nice post.. cheers....

Vinz said...

@gunj,

thanks..!!
:)

Vinz said...

@keshi,

i wont say everyone do say that..but i feel at least some does.
you and cess now had teamed up to bash all ass-holes it seems..!! :)

by the way we can ask our characters to say whatever we want... ;)

Vinz said...

@riversoul,

thanks Sid...

:)

Vinz said...

@solitaire,

:) very true...
but somewhere it will be alive, i feel..!!

Vinz said...

@Andrew,

yeah, thanks.!!

:)

Vinz said...

@arv,

that can be testified by only those who had experienced it...and it seems your are blessed..!!

:)

Pooja said...

yeah..dat happens all d tym...

gr8 happiness s hidden in li'l thngs..

Si_Lee said...

beautiful. Period.

Kartz said...

Greetings. Nice of you to drop-in bro'... Thanks for the blogroll.

Nice blog... Will explore it in due time.

Peace, and have a nice day.

Heart'n'Soul said...

Thts so true, most of the times all we need is to let go of that voice in our head tht says though u wanna talk, just test the othr person a lil...

Well written as always Vinu :)

Yamini Meduri said...

nice post yaar....this is the first time i am reading you but u made my mind think about "what next?"

good and keep blogging

make some time and visit mine tooo

WarmSunshine said...

that's really cute
you just made me realise again how lucky i am to have my fionce... thankyou for that :)
keep rocking!!

ceedy said...

Are you not glad for cell phones...warna us zamane mai - phone nahi lagta tha...disturbance hota tha....

this mode of communication has both side....fast lafdas and fast patana....

sometime I miss the endearing feeling there was in the waiting....

Saim said...

n yet sumtimes all d talk in the town cannot mend that fault line tht gets created in hearts:(
nice read!!!

Anwesa said...

its so difficult to be silent...

Vinz said...

@pooja,

very true...well said..these little things make up our life..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@descrying

thanks for the visit..

:)

Vinz said...

@kartz,

welcome...
thanks..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@mini mouse,

:)
hehe...your words come from experience i guess..

;)

Vinz said...

@dilmainhainpyar,

welcome to this space..
good to see that you liked the article...

hope to see you over here again..

:)

Vinz said...

@warm sunshine

oh yeah..u r lucky..!!
thanks for dropping by..

do keep visiting..

:)

Vinz said...

@ceedy,

yeah man...mobiles had made life easier and hectic..!!

:)

there will be always something we loose when we gain something, right..??

:)

Vinz said...

@saim,

very true..thats the power of such words..but yeah, it should be heart felt..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@anwesa,

very true..but some people do prefer silence..

;)

Cinderella said...

Awww....so darn real n so darn warm !!!

And this makes me think. Mobiles nahi hote toh najane kya hota !

I rem'ber our landline days, we used to fix times n hang around near the ph when the time arrived and you're damned if you miss that call !

ceedy said...

Are you emulating SRk now ;)

Vinz said...

@cinderella,

thank you cinderella...
yeah, life would have been boring without mobile.I cant live ten minutes without my mobile..

:)
fixing times and impatiently waiting for the calls..what all blunders happen that time..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@ceedy,

oh pheuleeezzz...

not him..

:)

ceedy said...

hahahhaa

but you did....just the english version - mai kyaaa karruuuuu :P

Vinz said...

@c..c..c..ceedy,

did you feel so..?
that was unintentional..

;)

AbbY said...

U,Ur Cell, and She...when comes togather volcano erupts in US.

Anonymous said...

he and babez are lucky... for some people the expected call never comes... and even after 4 years of waiting .... funny bloggers are born out of expecting calls

man in painting said...

@vinu
wonderful!
how did i miss you..
will be regular..
take care..
MIP

Vinz said...

@abby,

:)

Vinz said...

@chriz,

:)
maybe..

Vinz said...

@MIP,

thank you..thanks for dropping by...
keep visiting..!!

:)

♥ÐÅyÐяєÅмє®♥ said...

Lucky u bro....it just takes an initiative on one end..and it's not called losing if u gain the love by admitting yeah I was wrong :)

Devika Jyothi said...

So cute and so true...it only takes a few words, at times a smile to melt the tensions of little quarells....

Nice post!
will visit again...
devika

rainboy said...

I hope they both walk together forever,never to depart.

take care

Sai Hijara - Ferraris said...

I was caught in mid-air reading this...so so true...and so so sweet!

Vinz said...

@daydreamer,

~~it just takes an initiative on one end..~~

well said friend...life is all about implementing such simple things..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@devika

thanks devika for dropping by..
very well said..

keep visiting..!!

:)

david santos said...

Nicely written!
Great tallent. Have a nice week.

lukkydivz said...

this happens to me every night! we cant be indifferent for long, specially in love ;)

great read!

Aneesh said...

WOW! This has happened to almost all, I guess LOL. Nicely written :)

Vinz said...

@vicky

lets hope..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@mariposa,

thanks friend..
do keep visiting..!!

Vinz said...

@david,

thnx mate..
do keep visiting...

:)

Vinz said...

@divz,

great you could relate this story..
thats a great feeling..!!

:)

Vinz said...

@aneesh,

:)
thanks man..yeah it do happen with everyone...i just penned it down..

Anonymous said...

this happens to all of us at some point or the other... i guess... but it isn't easy all the time..nor successful... but i like the way u portrayed it and ...the fact that both people said sorry.... many a times its always a blame game... when a simple sorry can do wonders.... cheers

Vinz said...

@the army guy

it is never easy man..it is not..!!
the blame game is what destroys a relationship..

thanks for the visit..
do visiting..

Keshi said...

No updates?

Keshi.

Cяystal said...

The stratergies ought to be changed.
Ahh..I liked tht line!

nice thingie..

Unknown said...

This was too good... this has happened a few times with me when i have had a tiff with someone special, at times it just takes a little effort wherein one person has to just forgo their ego to make things fine.

Vinz said...

Reeta,

thanks friend...
you are very true..forgoing your ego is what brings the happiness in such relationships..!!

:)

Mads said...

thats really cute...one of the best stories i'v ever read....ur good at writing such senti stuff...great work,seriously...

:-)

Vinz said...

@mads,

:)
not the best story i guess..
anyways great it entertained u too..!!
keep visiting..!!

:)